Saturday, April 14, 2012

INCOMPLETE Chapter the Last




Six years later

The room was humbly furnished. A single bed, a few chairs and table, cupboard, bookshelves, and her puja. 
In the center among all the deities, was the daughter's picture. 

She was lost in thoughts in the midst of prayers.

"Pray to him, only when you remember him" Kaveri whispered in her ear.
She was still here. "When such bonds exist between two souls, they are never broken"
She had lived an year more than what the doctors had thought possible. She had agreed to get the treatment done but insisted that it was only the happiness that was carrying her through. She had healed every pain, she had taken away all the sorrow, all the agony. 

"Krishna"
Taarush was standing at the door smiling.
"I miss her terribly too"
She touched the picture lovingly "Why miss her? She's very much with us. Isn't she?"
They smiled at each other.
"Mr. and Mrs. Teotia have come. They wanted to meet you. They want to take Soumya home"
"Ah thats wonderful. I wanted to meet them as well. I'll come in a minute"
She went downstairs.
Taarush introduced her to the couple.
"Krishna, the life and breath of Jayant House" he said
"And his wife" she said smiling at him.
They laughed.
While they were talking, a child entered the room and sat next to Krishna, leaning her head on her arm.
"This is your daughter?"
"Yes, say hello to uncle baby"
"What's your name princess?" Mrs. Teotia affectionately inquired.
The child smiled shyly but proudly revealed

"Kaveri"



26 comments:

  1. This was one awe-wait for it till I find the remaining half-SSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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    1. Thank You so much for reading Rahul. GENUINELY EXTREMELY GRATEFUL!! and also for sharing this on your blog. You made me truly happy and you made my effort worth it.
      :)))))))

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  2. I came here through Rahul's blog. You are an amazing writing. I read all the parts in a go, and I was totally hooked on to it! :)
    Looking forward to more of your stories :)

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    1. Thanks a million tons. I am glad I could keep you interested enough to read through, and truly grateful for the appreciation.:)

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  3. The writing has been par excellence. But that comes with Rohu.

    What is really note worthy, is the fact that the story is one for the books or even the big screen. Well plotted, and one that's gonna walk with you after you've read it.

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    1. Thank you so much Anupam. Thank you for acknowledging this humble attempt in such a grand manner! But that comes with being Anupam. :)

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    2. wish I could make a film on "Incomplete Chapter"..already have scenes flashing before my eyes :-)

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    3. :) "THE GENEROUS ONE"
      Though I am sure its going to do fairly well in spite of all its exasperating flaws, provided it is placed under your care.. :))

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  4. Too good Rohu. Gripping and very well written.
    I must confess though that I waited for a post to indicate that it was the last part, before I read them all end-to-end ek saath :-). The suspense really gets to me otherwise :-)

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    1. I am glad you read Sri. Thanks a ton! I was looking forward to your feedback. :))

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  5. BRILLIANT! wahi sochoon....was missing something in part 9, clumsy me. This is just ... Am dumbfounded. (pats back) good work, rohu.

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    1. :D Thank you Sri. You are a huge inspiration. Thanks a ton for encouraging me the way you did! :)

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  6. wow...speechless! definitely novel material... Every time I saw the new chapter was on, I was re reading all the previous parts to make sure I didn't miss anything! Even if there were another 10 chapters I would have gladly read it! kudos Rohu!

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    1. Princess!! my love, this will sustain my smile for a month probably. Thank you ever so much. Its the biggest reward. All the effort I have put into this humble piece, you made it worthwhile! Thanks a ton!! God Bless you! :))

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  7. Rohini.. nature conspires to complete what is left incomplete.. in its own magical way.. beautifully thought and written.. you're in full form .. keep going!

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    1. Thank you so much Atreye, coming from you it certainly means a lot!! :))

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  8. CHUperrrrrrrrbbb !!! Oh and one more thing , Teotia is quite an uncommon name :)

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    1. HAHAHAHA!! Thanks a ton Buddy. I know it is.. God knows why it popped up. :D

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  9. Okay, now I am giving thank you speeches like I've won the Pulitzer... but wait, this appreciation means no less!! Thank you! :D

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  10. Is this a novel you are writing? Will look at earlier chapters at leisure.

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    1. nah...just a feeble attempt at sometihng.. :)

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  11. You should write a novel. You are a great narrator. Lovely story...:)

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    1. Thanks a million tons Saru! the appreciation means the world to me... :)

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  12. Rohu! You amaze me. This is brilliant stuff. I could visualize each scene. Very well written! :)

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    1. The story writes itself Anu. I was an incapable medium.. :))
      Thanks a ton!!

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  13. awesome work Rohini loved reading it :) here check out some of mine..... hope you like them

    http://saurabhchawla2345.blogspot.in/

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